LC Nidoran-F

[Sqookblooks]

[OVERVIEW]
Although it has access to Toxic Spikes, Nidoran-F is entirely outclassed as a defensive Toxic Spikes setter by Mareanie and Koffing, which boast better bulk. Other Poison-type Pokemon such as Foongus and Grimer-Alola also outclass it defensively and offensively as well. As such, Nidoran-F is bad and shouldn't be used.

[SET]
name: Toxic Spikes
move 1: Toxic Spikes
move 2: Super Fang
move 3: Poison Jab
move 4: Sucker Punch
item: Eviolite
ability: Poison Point
nature: Impish
evs: 60 Atk / 180 Def / 196 SpD / 28 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
This set aims to set Toxic Spikes and use Super Fang to chip switch-ins. However, Mareanie serves as a much better pick for Toxic Spikes due to its stronger bulk and access to recovery. In addition, Toxic Spikes is very mediocre in the Little Cup metagame.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[sqookblooks, 461079]]
- Quality checked by: [[fiend, 208173], [merritt, 213064]]
- Grammar checked by: [[electrolyte, 14807]]

 

[Sqookblooks]

I think this is ready for QC

 

[Fiend]

you have a few of minor grammar errors that you should go back and fix.
poison point seems more useful for the defensive role. hustle boost is nice, but it only serves to make sucker punch and super fang worse moves overall.
mention the general "meh" nature of t spikes in the set comments, which makes nidoran-f lackluster af
QC: 1/2

 

[Merritt]

[OVERVIEW]
This is honestly kind of long for how succulently you can describe Nidoran-F. The idea you want to get across is that Nidoran-F is entirely outclassed by the many other Poison-types in LC, and you're using way more words than necessary and going into too much detail about Toxic Spiking. Shorten this down to just saying very literally that Nidoran-F is entirely outclassed by many other Poison-types in LC due to its terrible stats and poor movepool, then say that Mareanie and Koffing can set up Toxic Spikes more effectively while Foongus and Alolan Grimer are better generally defensive Poison types.

[SET]
format for special defense EVs is SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
First sentence is fine, but again you're going way too wordy after that. Quickly mention that Mareanie is a much better Toxic Spikes setter due to its better stats and reliable recovery, then state that in addition, Toxic Spikes are a fairly mediocre entry hazard in the LC metagame.

[CREDITS]
You need another ] at the end of the QC and GP sections, it should end with ]] to close the bracket.

Tag me when this is implemented because it's a lot.

 

[Sqookblooks]

[OVERVIEW]
This is honestly kind of long for how succulently you can describe Nidoran-F. The idea you want to get across is that Nidoran-F is entirely outclassed by the many other Poison-types in LC, and you're using way more words than necessary and going into too much detail about Toxic Spiking. Shorten this down to just saying very literally that Nidoran-F is entirely outclassed by many other Poison-types in LC due to its terrible stats and poor movepool, then say that Mareanie and Koffing can set up Toxic Spikes more effectively while Foongus and Alolan Grimer are better generally defensive Poison types.

[SET]
format for special defense EVs is SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
First sentence is fine, but again you're going way too wordy after that. Quickly mention that Mareanie is a much better Toxic Spikes setter due to its better stats and reliable recovery, then state that in addition, Toxic Spikes are a fairly mediocre entry hazard in the LC metagame.

[CREDITS]
You need another ] at the end of the QC and GP sections, it should end with ]] to close the bracket.

Tag me when this is implemented because it's a lot.

Ok, Implemented!

 

[Merritt]

[OVERVIEW]
Say specifically other "Poison-type Pokemon" outclass it defensively, and would say also offensively.

[SET]
good, but you've got an extra line break between the end of the set and the set comments header

[SET COMMENTS]
good

[CREDITS]
should have mentioned this the first time - you don't want the <> in there. For example, it should be "- Written by: [[sqookblooks, 461079]]"

2/2

 

[Sqookblooks]

ready for GP!

 

[Electrolyte]

what a beast

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[OVERVIEW]
Although it has access to Toxic Spikes, Nidoran-F is entirely outclassed as a defensive Toxic Spikes setter by Mareanie and Koffing,(AC) whoich boast better bulk than it. Other Poison-type Pokemon such as Foongus and Grimer-Alola also outclass it defensively and offensively as well. As such, Nidoran-F is bad and shouldn't be used.

[SET]
name: Toxic Spikes
move 1: Toxic Spikes
move 2: Super Fang
move 3: Poison Jab
move 4: Sucker Punch
item: Eviolite
ability: Poison Point
nature: Impish
evs: 60 Atk / 180 Def / 196 SpD / 28 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
This set aims to set Toxic Spikes and use Super Fang to chip switch-ins. However,(comma instead of period) Mareanie serves as a much better pick for Toxic Spikes due to its stronger bulk and access to recovery. In addition, Toxic Spikes are is very mediocre in the Little Cup meta-(no hyphen, one word)game.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[sqookblooks, 461079]]
- Quality checked by: [[fiend, 208173], [merritt, 213064]]
- Grammar checked by: [[Electrolyte, check purple in my sig]]

GP 1/1

 

[Sqookblooks]

Done!