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Garchomp

Garchomp has a really good Dragon / Ground-typing (Add spaces and remove hyphen) and Rough Skin which allows it to damage you a foe when you they make contact. Fairies Fairy-types can switch-in to on Garchomp since Outrage doesn't effect affect them, (AC) but they must be weary wary of Earthquake. Garchomp can also setup set up Stealth Rocks Stealth Rock to weaken the opponent foe when they switch in. It can run a Defensive defensive set, and can also utilise utilize a Z-Earthquake Tectonic Rage set with SD Swords Dance and an Adamant Nature nature, so that it OHKOs OHKOes things like Heatran.

 

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Ferrothorn

Thanks to its great bulk and useful Grass / Steel-typing Ferrothorn is one of the best entry hazard setters in ubers Ubers. It fairs fares very well against defoggers such as Lati@as Latias and Latios, especially if it runs Toxic. Also, Toxic is useful for support Arceus forms and Giratina-Origin. Also, with With the combination of Iron Barbs, Spikes, Leech Seed and Toxic, Ferrothorn can easily wear down opponents for a teammate to clean up later. It does have some flaws, however. Ferrothorn is rendered useless by Taunt, is very slow, and has a nasty x4 4x weakness to Fire.

Clefable

There are a few options for the Clefable's last moveslot. Flamethrower heavily damages Steel types such as Scizor and Excadrill, while Ice Beam lures in and OHKOs Specially Defensive Glicsor. Psyschock deals more damage to Chansey, as it hit deals damage based on the other side of the spectrum Defense, rather than Special Defense. Finally, Thunder Wave is a splashable utility move that cripples many of Clefable's checks, including Talonflame, Scizor and Megagross Metagross.

Tapu Koko

Ground t-Types such as Landorus therian -T, Garchomp, and Swampert-mega are a problem for tapu koko Tapu Koko, as they are immune to Electric STAB, and can OHKO with EQ, harthquake. However, they can be killed KOed by Dazzling gGleam or HP iidden Power Ice. Choice Specs let Tapu kKoko hit hard, but locks you into 1 move unless you switch out. Pokemon who have high Special defence like Defense such as Chansey are also a problem because it lives all of it's Tapu Koko's attacks. Tapu Koko is very fast with 130 base sSpeed, so it is hard to revenge- kill unless you have a scarfer Choice Scarf User.

 

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Ferrothorn

It fairs fares very well against defoggers such as Lati@as Latias and Latios, especially if it runs Toxic. Also, Toxic is useful for support Arceus forms and Giratina-Origin.

While I agree that the "also" was used poorly, these two sentences need some sort of transition because the first ends with talking about Toxic and the second begins the same way. You could just put the "also" after "Toxic is" to improve flow by eliminating a comma, or you could do something like "Speaking of Toxic, it's also useful for..."

Also, with With the combination of Iron Barbs, Spikes, Leech Seed and Toxic, Ferrothorn can easily wear down opponents for a teammate to clean up later.

There's nothing wrong with "easily" or "clean up," not sure why you removed them.

It does have some flaws, however. Ferrothorn is rendered useless by Taunt, is very slow, and has a nasty x4 4x weakness to Fire.

Good parallelism fix, but there's nothing wrong with "nasty;" it gives some personality to the writing without sounding unprofessional.

You made some good changes, but other objective errors listed on the Standards went under your radar; they include the hyphen in "Grass / Steel-typing," "defogger" not being capitalized, "Giratina-Origin" instead of Giratina-O, the lack of a serial comma in "the combination of Iron Barbs, Spikes, Leech Seed and Toxic," and "wear down opponents" instead of foes.

Clefable

Flamethrower heavily damages Steel types such as Scizor and Excadrill, while Ice Beam lures in and OHKOs Specially Defensive Glicsor.

The problem here isn't the use of "in" but rather the idea that Ice Beam, a move, does the luring. A more accurate description would be "while Ice Beam lets Clefable lure and OHKO." Also note the missing hyphen in "Steel types," the use of "OHKOs" when it should be "OHKOes," and the incorrect capitalization of "Specially Defensive Gliscor."

Psyschock deals more damage to Chansey, as it hit deals damage based on the other side of the spectrum Defense, rather than Special Defense.

Good change. I wouldn't say that comma is necessary, though.

Finally, Thunder Wave is a splashable utility move that cripples many of Clefable's checks, including Talonflame, Scizor and Megagross Metagross.

"Splashable" is a buzzword, so its removal is smart. You could consider replacing it with a more accurate descriptor like "catch-all," however. Also note the missing serial comma.

Tapu Koko

Ground t-Types such as Landorus therian -T, Garchomp, and Swampert-mega are a problem for tapu koko Tapu Koko, as they are immune to Electric STAB, and can OHKO with EQ, harthquake.

Your first couple of changes are a bit hard on the eyes; what I'd do is [Ground-(hyph)types] and [Landorus-T therian]. Also, you incorrectly capitalize it as "-Types" when it should be "-types." Next, you correctly add a serial comma, but it's hard to see without any extra indicator. Most GPers put (AC) right after to bring attention to it. "Swampert-mega" is certainly wrong, but you fail to correct it to "Mega Swampert," making it look like we're talking about the base Pokemon and not the Mega Evolution, which is usually a very important distinction. The STAB in "immune to Electric STAB" shouldn't be there, as it has no bearing on immunity and isn't being used as an adjective. STAB is incorrectly used quite often in analyses, so that's something to watch out for. Finally, that EQ correction is another eyesore; an example of a nicer fix is [EQ, Earthquake.]

Choice Specs let Tapu kKoko hit hard, but locks you into 1 move unless you switch out.

All items are singular, so it should be "Choice Specs lets." "You" refers to the battler, not the Pokemon.

Pokemon who have high Special defence like Defense such as Chansey are also a problem because it lives all of it's Tapu Koko's attacks.

"Pokemon that," not "Pokemon who." We avoid humanizing them. "defence" to Defense is correct, but there's nothing wrong with "like" in this case. "it" should be "they' since the subject is plural, and Pokemon don't "live" attacks, they take or survive them (I greatly prefer the former).

Tapu Koko is very fast with 130 base sSpeed, so it is hard to revenge- kill unless you have a scarfer Choice Scarf User.

Base 130 Speed, not 130 base Speed. "Scarfer" indeed should be "Choice Scarf user," but there's no reason to capitalize user.

Keep at it! You're clearly paying a decent amount of attention; what GPing largely comes down to is becoming intimate with the standards and common general grammatical errors. If you're serious about GP, look closely at what changes GPers make to actual analyses, don't be afraid to post amchecks (they almost never hurt), and ask questions / hang out on our Discord! We're quite laid-back; I'm about the meanest guy you'll find on there.

Let me know if you still want evaluation, JALMONT and deetah

 

[JALMONT]

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yea it would be nice although alternatively u could just send me an answer key to look over. whatever is convenient for u

 

[deetah]

Yes, I would still like feedback as I never got any.

 

[CryoGyro]

JALMONT

koko

Turns out you got it almost perfectly! The only sentence still with problems is the Chansey one:

Pokemon who have high Special

This should be "Pokemon that," as using "who" humanizes them the same way using gendered pronouns over "it" does.

are also a problem because they live it lives all of its it's attacks.

As P Squared would tell you, you don't live a gunshot, you survive it. I personally don't like use of "survive" either, as Pokemon don't die in battles, but it's technically accepted. Other alternatives are "take" and "withstand." As for your comment on this part of the sentence being vague, you're absolutely right; this is where you can ask the writer for elaboration when checking actual analyses.

Question based off seeing some responses - should "you" be removed usually?

As stated by the standards in section 2.2:

• When referring to the battler, use the pronoun "you." Do not use "you" to refer to a Pokemon.

A lot of players use "you" as shorthand for the Pokemon they're talking about, since it's easy to self-insert as the Pokemon you're using when thinking about battle scenarios. It's inaccurate, however, hence the frequent removal of "you."

deetah

Garchomp

Garchomp has a really good Dragon / Ground-typing (Add spaces and remove hyphen)

Correct change; however, your punctuation highlighting should not be the same color as you comments, as that's unnecessarily ambiguous. In this case, the hyphen should be red to be consistent with other removals.

Rough Skin which allows it to damage you a foe when you they make contact.

Inappropriate use of "you" indeed, but you've also introduced a problem: you're using "they" to refer to "a foe," which is singular and non-human. You can correct this with either
-a foe when it makes contact
-foes when they make contact
Also note that "which" must be preceded by a comma.

Fairy-types can switch-in to on Garchomp

There should not be a hyphen; "switch-in" is only a noun that refers to a Pokemon, well, switching in.

Garchomp can also setup set up Stealth Rocks Stealth Rock to weaken the opponent foe when they switch in.

Another foe/they conflict here, and in this case must be fixed by "foes" because Stealth Rock doesn't target any one foe in particular.

It can run a Defensive defensive set, and can also utilise utilize a Z-Earthquake Tectonic Rage set with SD Swords Dance and an Adamant Nature nature, so that it OHKOs OHKOes things like Heatran.

Very minor thing, but I'd remove the comma after "nature" to improve the flow of this meaty sentence.

Great stuff; all you need is a bit more experience to catch the subtler things I pointed out.

 

[deetah]

JALMONT

koko

Turns out you got it almost perfectly! The only sentence still with problems is the Chansey one:

This should be "Pokemon that," as using "who" humanizes them the same way using gendered pronouns over "it" does.

As P Squared would tell you, you don't live a gunshot, you survive it. I personally don't like use of "survive" either, as Pokemon don't die in battles, but it's technically accepted. Other alternatives are "take" and "withstand." As for your comment on this part of the sentence being vague, you're absolutely right; this is where you can ask the writer for elaboration when checking actual analyses.

As stated by the standards in section 2.2:

• When referring to the battler, use the pronoun "you." Do not use "you" to refer to a Pokemon.

A lot of players use "you" as shorthand for the Pokemon they're talking about, since it's easy to self-insert as the Pokemon you're using when thinking about battle scenarios. It's inaccurate, however, hence the frequent removal of "you."

deetah

Garchomp

Correct change; however, your punctuation highlighting should not be the same color as you comments, as that's unnecessarily ambiguous. In this case, the hyphen should be red to be consistent with other removals.

Inappropriate use of "you" indeed, but you've also introduced a problem: you're using "they" to refer to "a foe," which is singular and non-human. You can correct this with either
-a foe when it makes contact
-foes when they make contact
Also note that "which" must be preceded by a comma.

There should not be a hyphen; "switch-in" is only a noun that refers to a Pokemon, well, switching in.

Another foe/they conflict here, and in this case must be fixed by "foes" because Stealth Rock doesn't target any one foe in particular.

Very minor thing, but I'd remove the comma after "nature" to improve the flow of this meaty sentence.

Great stuff; all you need is a bit more experience to catch the subtler things I pointed out.

Thank you for the feedback!

 

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mewtwo

Pystrike Psystrike is a strong STAB move that and hits Pokémon Pokemon that don't resist it and hits Special special walls like Blissey on their defense Defense. It also chips some of Mewtwos Mewtwo's switchins switch-ins like Ho-oh Ho-Oh and Primal-Groudon Primal Groudon. Ice Beam OHKOs OHKOes Mega Salamence and Rayquaza (RC) and hitting hits Yveltal, Arceus Ground Arceus-Ground, Zygarde-Complete, Ultra Necrozma, and both Giratina forms formes hard. Fire Blast is very important for hitting Dusk-Mane-Necrozma Necrozma-DM that which resists most of Mewtwo's moves and certain other Psychic resists, such as Steel types Steel-types like Mega-Scizor Mega Scizor, Ferothorn Ferrothorn, Celesteela, Magearna, (AC) and Aegislash. Focus Blast hits Steel Types other Steel types [Steel-types have been mentioned already, so use of "other" is helpful] like Dialga (RC) and lures allows Mewtwo to lure in [moves don't lure] Dark Types like Tyranitar, Darkrai and Arceus-Dark. Alternately Alternatively, Calm Mind gives Mewtwo the ability to setup set up and potentially sweep and makes it so Mewtwo can OHKO and or 2HKO most Pokemon after a boost. Also, Shadow Ball can be used as well to kill Lunala and hit a large amount of switchins switch-ins in for one moveslot.

muk

Maximum attack Attack investment and an Adamant Nature nature lets let Muk-Alola Alolan Muk deal as much damage as possible, (AC) while and max maximum SpD Special Defense EVs with an AV Assault Vest gives give Alolan [not sure if alolan is neccessary] Muk a very respectable amount of Special special bulk to check Pokémon Pokemon such as Chandelure, Latias or and Gengar more effectively. A Brave Nature nature should be used if running Fire Blast as it doesn't lower it's Alolan Muk's special attack Special Attack. Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola's contact attacks moves an additional chance to Poison poison opponents foes.

If I end up doing more, should I make another post or edit this one?

 

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mewtwo

Pystrike Psystrike is a strong STAB move that and hits Pokémon Pokemon that don't resist it and hits Special special walls like Blissey on their defense Defense.

All of the objective errors here have been corrected. However, I personally have a strong dislike of the phrase "hits x on their Defense." Stats are a bit too abstract to be hitting directly; a rewording like "exploits the lower Defense of special walls" is more accurate.

Ice Beam OHKOs OHKOes Mega Salamence and Rayquaza (RC) and hitting hits Yveltal, Arceus Ground Arceus-Ground, Zygarde-Complete, Ultra Necrozma, and both Giratina forms formes hard.

Good corrections here; I'd just like to point out that you can avoid the double "and" there by putting the "hits x hard" part before the "OHKOes x" section. Nothing objective, just might look a bit nicer.

Fire Blast is very important for hitting Dusk-Mane-Necrozma Necrozma-DM that which resists most of Mewtwo's moves and certain other Psychic resists, such as Steel types Steel-types like Mega-Scizor Mega Scizor, Ferothorn Ferrothorn, Celesteela, Magearna, (AC) and Aegislash.

"which resists most of Mewtwo's moves" should be surrounded by commas. "Resists" as a noun is common slang but incorrect; a better term here is "swtich-ins."

Focus Blast hits Steel Types other Steel types [Steel-types have been mentioned already, so use of "other" is helpful] like Dialga (RC) and lures allows Mewtwo to lure in [moves don't lure] Dark Types like Tyranitar, Darkrai and Arceus-Dark.

Good addition of "other" there. "Steel types' is missing a hyphen, though, and you missed "Dark Types" and the lack of serial comma at the end.

Also, Shadow Ball can be used as well to kill Lunala and hit a large amount of switchins switch-ins in for one moveslot.

You don't kill Pokemon, you KO them.

muk

Maximum attack Attack investment and an Adamant Nature nature lets let Muk-Alola Alolan Muk deal as much damage as possible, (AC) while and max maximum SpD Special Defense EVs with an AV Assault Vest gives give Alolan [not sure if alolan is neccessary] Muk

It isn't as long as you've clearly established which form you're talking about, but you can avoid the issue entirely here by just using "it."

a very respectable amount of Special special bulk to check Pokémon Pokemon such as Chandelure, Latias or and Gengar more effectively.

A comma should be after Latias.

A Brave Nature nature should be used if running Fire Blast as it doesn't lower it's Alolan Muk's special attack Special Attack.

When using "as" in the same manner as "because," it must be preceded by a comma. The removals and additions at the end here should be grouped by color for better readability. ( it's special attack Alolan Muk's Special Attack)

Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola's contact attacks moves an additional chance to Poison poison opponents foes.

Missed a Muk-Alola there. Again, group your changes.

Good knowledge of the standards is on display. All that's missing is more scrutiny and general knowledge, which come easily enough.

 

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Mew

Mew is an extremely versatile a unique Pokemon because it can learn every TM and HM in the game of its wide movepool. Furthermore, Mew is the one of the only Defogger Defoggers in the metagame with access to Will-O-Wisp and with no Stealth Rock weakness, which lets it allowing it to cripple Defiant users such as Bisharp by halving their Attack (Burn reducing physical attack usually isn't required info in an analysis). Overall, Mew has good offensive and defensive all-around base stats, (AC) but is not really that outstanding when compared to bulkier Psychic-types such as Mega Slowbro, and regular Slowbro, and Cresselia (Although Cresselia is quite bulky, it isn't really used outside of Trick Room). Mew also has access to a form of reliable recovery in Soft-Boiled, which contributes to Mew's longevity on the field. Synchronize is a useful ability for Mew (RC) because it can can punish status users if they inflict status on Mew, (Remove Period, AC) It can also provide such as providing utility against Scald burns. However, Mew's typing is subpar, which leaves it very vulnerable being vulnerable to common Bug-, Ghost-, and Dark-types, such as Mega Scizor, Gengar, and Mega Gyarados. Mew also has Four-Moveslot Syndrome because it cannot benefit from all move options it learns its role in a team depends greatly on the chosen moves.

First time ever trying a GP check so please don't be mad if this is actually terrible.

 

[Havens]

Figured I'd do some more of these:

Ferrothorn

Thanks to its great bulk and useful Grass / Steel-typing, (AC) Ferrothorn is one of the best entry hazard setters in ubers Ubers (Ubers is capitalized as it is the name of a metagame). It fairs fares very well against defoggers such as Lati@s Latias and Latios (pick either one indiviually or both, but this shortening doesn't work), especially if it runs Toxic. Also, Toxic is useful for support Arceus forms and Giratina-Origin. Also, with the combination of Iron Barbs, Spikes, Leech Seed and Toxic, Ferrothorn can easily wear down opponents for a teammate to clean up later. It does have some flaws, however. Ferrothorn is rendered useless by Taunt, is very slow, and has a nasty x4 4x weakness to Fire.

Tsareena

Tsareena works best on Offensive offensive teams that appreciate a Pokemon that can break through most Defensive defensive cores, (AC) as it is able to 1HKO OHKO Quagsire, (RC) and 1HKO Alomomola after Rocks Stealth Rock damage. Tsareena is relatively slow so teammates such as Choice Scarf Infernape, Choice Scarf Hydreigon or Aerodactyl-Mega Mega Aerodactyl that can revenge- (RH) kill faster threats for Tsareena are useful. Pokemon such as Scizor and Nidoking are good Poison Resists that can help Tsareena against the majority of Poison Types Poison-types that can freely switchin switch into it. In return, Tsareena can hit Psychic Types Psychic-types with Knock Off, and help against Water- (AH) and Ground Types Ground-types for Nidoking. It also appreciates hazard support from Rockers Stealth Rock users like Cobalion or and Swampert, so it can wear down potential checks, can damage Rocks Stealth Rock-weak Pokemon like Moltres and further pressure opponents foes.

Tapu Koko

Ground-(AH)types such as Landorus therian Landorus-T, Garchomp and Swampert-mega Mega Swampert are a problem for tapu Tapu Koko as they are immune to its Electric-type STAB moves, and can OHKO it with EQ Earthquake, (RC). however However, (AC) they can be killed by Dazzling gleam Gleam or HP ice Hidden Power Ice (must be spelled out as it's a move). Choice Specs lets Tapu koko hit as hard as possible, but locks you itself into 1 one (must be written out) move unless you it switches out. Pokemon who that have high Special defence Defense like Chansey are also a problem because it they lives all of it's Tapu Koko's attacks. Tapu Koko is very fast with 130 base spe Speed so it is hard to revenge- (AH) kill unless you have a scarfer Choice Scarf user.

 

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Muk

Maximum attack Attack investment and an Adamant Nature nature lets Muk-Alola Alolan Muk deal as much damage as possible while maximum SpD Special Defense EVs with an AV Assault Vest gives Alolan Muk a very respectable amount of Special bulk special bulk to check Pokémon Pokemon such as Chandelure, Latias, (AC) or Gengar more effectively. A Brave Nature nature should be used if running Fire Blast, (AC) as it doesn't lower it's (Remove AP) special attack Special Attack. Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola's Alolan Muk's contact attacks an additional chance to Poison poison opponents foes ("opponents" refers to the player, not the pokemon).

Tapu Koko

Ground-types (AH) such as Landorus therian Landorus-T, Garchomp, (AC) and Swampert-mega Mega Swampert are a problem for tapu Koko Tapu Koko, (AC) as they are immune to its Electric-type STAB moves, and can it OHKO with EQ Earthquake. (AC) ,(RC) however However,(AC) they can be killed KOed (pokemon cant be killed) by Dazzling gleam Gleam or HP ice Hidden Power Ice. Choice Specs let lets Tapu koko Tapu Koko hit hard, but lock locks you Tapu Koko into 1 one move unless you it switch switches out. Pokemon who that have high Special defence Defense like Chansey (you should probably give 1 or 2 more examples) are also a problem, (AC) because it lives they can live all of it's Tapu Koko's attacks. Tapu Koko is very fast, (AC) with 130 base spe Speed, (AC) so it is hard to revenge- (RH) kill unless you have a scarfer Choice Scarf user. (this section sounds like checks and counters and i dont really see what the last sentence has to do with checking and countering tapu koko, instead talking about the fact that tapu koko is hard to revenge kill. because of that i think this last sentence should be moved to the overview)

Ferrothorn

Thanks to its great bulk and useful Grass / Steel- (RH) typing, (AC) Ferrothorn is one of the best entry hazard setters in ubers Ubers. It Ferrothorn (flows better) fairs fares very well against defoggers Defoggers such as Lati@s Latios and Latias, especially if it runs Toxic. Also, Toxic is also useful for support Arceus forms formes and Giratina-OriginO. Also, with the combination of Iron Barbs, Spikes, Leech Seed and Toxic, Ferrothorn can easily wear foes down opponents for a teammate to clean up later. It does have some flaws, however. Ferrothorn is rendered useless by Taunt, is very slow, and has a nasty x4 4x weakness to Fire.

 

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Charizard

It's best to setup set up DD Dragon Dance towards the end of the game, when Mega Charizard-X's Mega Charizard X checks and counters are out of play or have been weakened enough to be picked off after a boost. Charizard-X Mega Charizard X should set up on a Pokemon that it forces out, such as Mega Scizor and Celebi, or against Electric-types such as Manectric-Mega and Raikou. Rotom-Wash is an easy target Pokemon (status moves have no target) to setup set up on if it is running HP investment, as it can't 2HKO Charizard-X Mega Charizard X with hydro pump Hydro Pump, and is stalled out with Roost. Make sure you Mega Charizard X (the Pokemon, not the player) avoid avoids Thunder Wave from pokemon Pokemon like Cresselia, Thundurus (which also has Prankster) (find some way to integrate it without parentheses or entirely delete it) (AC) and Mega-Slowbro Mega Slowbro (AC) as paralys Paralysis cuts Mega Charizard-X's Mega Charizard X's speed Speed in half, making it suspectible to a higher amount of revengers revenge killers.

Mew

Mew is an extremely versatile Pokemon because it can learn every TM and HM in the game of its expansive movepool (what learning every TM and HM in the game actually causes). Furthermore, Mew is the only Defogger in the metagame with access to Will-O-Wisp and no Stealth Rock weakness no Stealth Rock weakness and access to Will-O-Wisp (antecedent next to pronoun), which lets it cripple Defiant users such as Bisharp by halving their Attack. Overall, Mew has good offensive and defensive stats but is not really that (nothing to which to compare given) outstanding when compared to bulkier Psychic-types such as Mega Slowbro, regular Slowbro, and Cresselia. Mew also has access to a form of reliable recovery in Soft-Boiled, which contributes to Mew's longevity on the field. Synchronize is a useful ability for Mew, (RC) because it can can punish status users if they inflict status on Mew (already clear). It can also provide utility against Scald burns (What role does Mew have from this?). However, Mew's typing is subpar, which leaves leaving it very vulnerable to common Bug-, Ghost-, and Dark-types, (RC) such as Scizor, Gengar, and Mega Gyarados. Mew also has four-moveslot syndrome because it cannot benefit from all move options it learns (four-moveslot syndrome is incorrectly used).

 

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Pretty sure we're still using this thread, right? martha big fan

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Mew

Mew is an extremely versatile a unique Pokemon because it can learn every TM and HM in the game of its wide movepool. Furthermore, Mew is the one of the only Defogger Defoggers in the metagame with access to Will-O-Wisp and with no Stealth Rock weakness, which lets it allowing it to cripple Defiant users such as Bisharp by halving their Attack (Burn reducing physical attack usually isn't required info in an analysis). Overall, Mew has good offensive and defensive all-around base stats, (AC) but is not really that outstanding when compared to bulkier Psychic-types such as Mega Slowbro, and regular Slowbro, and Cresselia (Although Cresselia is quite bulky, it isn't really used outside of Trick Room). Mew also has access to a form of reliable recovery in Soft-Boiled, which contributes to Mew's longevity on the field. Synchronize is a useful ability for Mew (RC) because it can can punish status users if they inflict status on Mew, (Remove Period, AC) It can also provide such as providing utility against Scald burns. However, Mew's typing is subpar, which leaves it very vulnerable being vulnerable to common Bug-, Ghost-, and Dark-types, such as Mega Scizor, Gengar, and Mega Gyarados. Mew also has Four-Moveslot Syndrome because it cannot benefit from all move options it learns its role in a team depends greatly on the chosen moves.

First time ever trying a GP check so please don't be mad if this is actually terrible.

In general, don't make subjective changes, and avoid changing how an author wrote a sentence whenever possible. A lot of these changes, while grammatically fine, aren't necessary, and the original wording could have been left in place. Additionally, avoid making QC changes unless something is factually incorrect. i.e., Cresselia should have been left in, since it's up to the qc team to make these distinctions. Rest of the comments are in italics:

Mew

Mew is an extremely versatile a unique (unnecessary change) Pokemon because it can learn every TM and HM in the game of its wide movepool. (this is fine) Furthermore, Mew is the one of the only Defogger Defoggers (leave this up to QC or mention why you made the change in a comment, i.e. if Rotom-W is in the metagame) in the metagame with access to Will-O-Wisp and with no Stealth Rock weakness, which lets it allowing it to (unnecessary change) cripple Defiant users such as Bisharp by halving their Attack (Burn reducing physical attack usually isn't required info in an analysis) (while this is true, it's nice to have a small chunk of clarifying info. You're fine to take it out but you can generally leave something like this in, as it helps the overall flow of the writing). Overall, Mew has good offensive and defensive all-around base (unnecessary change) stats, (AC) (No comma before but if there's no subject of the following clause. A comma would be right here if the following bit were "but it is not really...") but is not really that (unneeded removal) outstanding when compared to bulkier Psychic-types such as Mega Slowbro, and regular Slowbro, and Cresselia (Although Cresselia is quite bulky, it isn't really used outside of Trick Room). (leave these distinctions up to QC) Mew also has access to a form of (fluff removal like this is fine) reliable recovery in Soft-Boiled, which contributes to Mew's longevity on the field. Synchronize is a useful ability for Mew (RC) because it can can punish status users if they inflict status on Mew, (Remove Period, AC) It can also provide such as providing utility against Scald burns. However, Mew's typing is subpar, which leaves it very vulnerable being vulnerable (unnecessary change) to common Bug-, Ghost-, and Dark-types, such as Mega Scizor, Gengar, and Mega Gyarados. Mew also has Four-Moveslot Syndrome (four-moveslot syndrome is lowercase, you can usually check https://www.smogon.com/forums/threads/spelling-and-grammar-standards.3588427/ for capitalization standards on terms like this) because it cannot benefit from all move options it learns its role in a team depends greatly on the chosen moves. (not strictly correct, this is more an issue of the mons it can check strongly changing based off of its coverage rather than its role strictly changing. I.e. Mew can learn a huge array of coverage but because teams need it as a Rocker or Defogger and it's forced into having Recovery and usually Wisp, it's left with only a single coverage slots in most cases. I agree though that additional clarification should be added to the last sentence of this analysis.)

 

[autumn]

I picked one from each user to review here; don't hesistate to pm me on discord if you have any questions / concerns or want me to look at other examples. Overall, these were all pretty good with a good understanding of grammar and standards, so keep going!

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Tsareena

Tsareena works best on Offensive offensive teams that appreciate a Pokemon that can break through most Defensive defensive cores, (AC) as it is able to 1HKO OHKO Quagsire, (RC) and 1HKO (should change this one to OHKO too because you changed meaning from OHKO Quagsire and OHKO Alomomola after Stealth Rock to OHKO both after Stealth Rock by removing and not replacing) Alomomola after Rocks Stealth Rock damage.

Tsareena is relatively slow so (use a comma before so unless it means "so that") teammates such as Choice Scarf Infernape, Choice Scarf Hydreigon (Smogon uses the serial comma (comma in a list of three or more) so there should be a comma here) or (or should be and here. Because "teammates" is plural and referring to 3 Pokemon, it should be "and" to also be plural and agree with it. "A teammate" would be correct with "or" because both are singular, but its better to change and/or in most situations to avoid altering meaning) Aerodactyl-Mega Mega Aerodactyl that can revenge- (RH) kill faster threats for Tsareena are useful.

Pokemon such as Scizor and Nidoking are good Poison Resists (you cannot use resists as a noun. Poison-resistant Pokemon, Poison-type checks etc work but you can't refer to a Pokemon as a resist) that can help Tsareena against the majority of Poison Types Poison-types that can freely switchin switch into it.

In return, Tsareena can hit Psychic Types Psychic-types with Knock Off, (remove the comma here; commas should only be used before and / but / or if both clauses are independent. "help against Water- and Ground-types" is not) and help against Water- (AH) and Ground Types Ground-types for Nidoking.

It also appreciates (entry hazard support; best to include entry if it's the first time referring to it in a section) hazard support from Rockers Stealth Rock users like Cobalion or and Swampert, so it can wear down potential checks, can (not needed here because the list splits after can and all three parts of it make sense "can wear down checks" "can damage Stealth Rock-weak Pokemon" "can pressure foes" so you only need the first one) damage Rocks Stealth Rock-weak Pokemon like Moltres (serial comma) and further pressure opponents foes.

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Ferrothorn

Thanks to its great bulk and useful Grass / Steel- (RH) typing, (AC) Ferrothorn is one of the best entry hazard setters in ubers Ubers.

It Ferrothorn (flows better) (understandable but not really necessary because it follows the first sentence, which used ferrothorn last, on) fairs fares very well against defoggers Defoggers such as Lati@s Latios and Latias, especially if it runs Toxic. Also, Toxic is also useful for support Arceus forms formes and Giratina-OriginO. Also, (also is repeated often and doesn't really work here, as it's a new idea) with the combination of Iron Barbs, Spikes, Leech Seed and Toxic, Ferrothorn can easily wear foes down opponents (wear down foes is also correct; word order didn't need to be changed so try to avoid changes that aren't required or necessary) for a teammate to clean up later.

It does have some flaws, however. (lines like this are complete filler, and GP remove them as fluff because they don't add anything and flaws are explained right after( Ferrothorn is rendered useless by Taunt, is very slow, and has a nasty x4 4x weakness to Fire.

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Mega Charizard X

It's best to setup set up DD Dragon Dance towards the end of the game, when Mega Charizard-X's Mega Charizard X (should be Mega Charizard X's, you removed the 's with your change) checks and counters are out of play or have been weakened enough to be picked off after a boost.

Charizard-X Mega Charizard X should set up on a Pokemon that it forces out, such as Mega Scizor and Celebi (should be Mega Scizor or Celebi, "a Pokemon" is singular, so use "or" to agree with it) or against Electric-types such as Manectric-Mega (Mega Manectric - Mega Evolutions are formatted as Mega [Pokemon]) and Raikou. Rotom-Wash (Rotom-W; formes are truncated on Smogon, and a full list is available on the standards) is an easy target Pokemon (status moves have no target) (this really isn't needed; "an easy target" is a phrase and this would be an unnecessary subjective change, which GP wants to avoid) to setup set up on if it is running HP investment, as it can't 2HKO Charizard-X Mega Charizard X with hydro pump Hydro Pump, (remove comma here. Only use commas before / and / but / or if both clauses are independent, and "is stalled out by Roost" is not) and is stalled out with Roost.

Make sure you Mega Charizard X (the Pokemon, not the player) avoid avoids Thunder Wave from pokemon Pokemon like Cresselia, Thundurus (which also has Prankster) (find some way to integrate it without parentheses or entirely delete it) (don't entirely delete. You don't want to delete QC approved content when checking. You can change the parentheses to commas and directly make the change instead of commenting for the writer to) (AC) (when you say AC, actually add the comma for ease of access and convenience) and Mega-Slowbro Mega Slowbro (AC) as paralys Paralysis (spelling change is correct, but status conditions (burn / poison / paralysis etc) aren't capitalised) cuts Mega Charizard-X's Mega Charizard X's speed Speed in half, making it suspectible (susceptible) to a higher amount (should be a higher number; use number for things that are countable (Pokemon/turns/number of revenge killers it's susceptible to etc) and amount for things that aren't) of revengers revenge killers.

 

[tondas]

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Mega Charizard X

It's best to setup set up DD Dragon Dance towards the end of the game late-game (RC) when Mega Charizard X's (RH) checks and counters are out of play or have been weakened enough to be picked off after a boost. Mega Charizard X (RH) should set up on a Pokemon that it forces out, such as Mega Scizor and or Celebi, or against Electric-types such as Manectric-Mega Mega Manectric and Raikou. Rotom-Wash is an easy target to setup set up on if it is running HP investment, as it can't 2HKO Mega Charizard X (RH) with hydro pump Hydro Pump (RC) and is stalled out with Roost. Make sure you Mega Charizard X avoid avoids Thunder Wave from pokemon like Cresselia, Prankster Thundurus (which also has Prankster), (AC) and Mega Slowbro(RH),(AC) as paralys paralysis cuts Mega Charizard X's (RH) speed Speed in half (RC) making which makes it suspectible susceptible to a higher amount of revengers revenge killers.

Clefable

There are a few options for the Clefable's last moveslot. Flamethrower heavily damages Steel-types (AH) such as Scizor and Excadrill, while Ice Beam lures in and OHKOes Sspecially Ddefensive Glicsor Gliscor. Psyschock Psyshock deals more damage to Chansey, as it targets its worse Defense stat hits on the other side of the spectrum. Finally, Thunder Wave is a great utility move that cripples many of Clefable's checks (RC) including Talonflame, Scizor, (AC) and Megagross Mega Metagross.

 

[xapx]

I tried a few more just for practice

Clefable

There are a few options for the last moveslot. Flamethrower heavily damages Steel-types such as Scizor and Excadrill, while Ice Beam lures in and OHKOes specially defensive Glicsor Gliscor. Psyschock deals more damage to Chansey, as its hits on the other side of the spectrum damage is based on the foe's physical defense. Finally, Thunder Wave is a great utility move that cripples many of Clefable's checks, including Talonflame, Scizor, (AC) and Mega(add space)Metagross.

Bronzong

Bronzong is able to check a large amount of threats in the tier such as wallbreakers (remove hyphen) and sweepers like Flygon, Glalie-Mega, Dragalge, Minior, (AC) and Comfey, thanks to its amazing Psychic/Steel(remove hyphens, hyphen isn't required for [type] typing) typing, (remove semicolon, AC) which grants it 9 resistances and an immunity. Bronzong's Levitate ability also gives it immunity to what would otherwise be a weakness Ground, (AC) leaving it with just three weaknesses. (add period) and Its high Defensive stats mixed defenses allows it to check many specially(remove hyphen)offensive Pokemon such as Swellow, Gardevoir, Diancie, (AC) and the recently introduced Necrozma. Bronzong is also a solid Stealth Rock setter of Stealth rocks thanks to its (remove apostrophe) great bulk. A very low Speed stat of 30 both hurts it and helps it, as Bronzong will almost always usually be taking forced to take a hit before moving, however although it also increases the power of its Gyro Ball.

 

[Rabia]

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Mega Charizard X

It's best to setup set up DD Dragon Dance towards the end of the game late-game (RC) when Mega Charizard X's (RH) checks and counters are out of play or have been weakened enough to be picked off after a boost. Mega Charizard X (RH) should set up on a Pokemon that it forces out, such as Mega Scizor and or Celebi, or against Electric-types such as Manectric-Mega Mega Manectric and Raikou. Rotom-Wash is an easy target to setup set up on if it is running HP investment, as it can't 2HKO Mega Charizard X (RH) with hydro pump Hydro Pump (RC) and is stalled out with Roost. Make sure you Mega Charizard X avoid avoids Thunder Wave from pokemon like Cresselia, Prankster Thundurus (which also has Prankster), (AC) and Mega Slowbro(RH),(AC) as paralys paralysis cuts Mega Charizard X's (RH) speed Speed in half (RC) making which makes it suspectible susceptible to a higher amount of revengers revenge killers.

Clefable

There are a few options for the Clefable's last moveslot. Flamethrower heavily damages Steel-types (AH) such as Scizor and Excadrill, while Ice Beam lures in and OHKOes Sspecially Ddefensive Glicsor Gliscor. Psyschock Psyshock deals more damage to Chansey, as it targets its worse Defense stat hits on the other side of the spectrum. Finally, Thunder Wave is a great utility move that cripples many of Clefable's checks (RC) including Talonflame, Scizor, (AC) and Megagross Mega Metagross.

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most of this was well done; only one mistake I see that you missed "pokemon such as Cresselia, ...". one unnecessary change I see you made (and one incorrect change) was when you changed "Speed in half, making.." to "Speed in half which makes...". not only is the change to "which makes" unneeded, since it doesn't change the meaning at all, but the comma removal is incorrect; "which" pretty much always has a comma before it, and -ing verbs follow this same rule in the context for this paragraph.

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two incorrect changes I see this time: the phrase is always lures in and KOes, not lures and KOes. secondly, you always precede "including" with a comma when it's leading to a list. the other changes are good though. I could also argue that "as it targets its worse Defense stat" has some ambiguity between the two uses of 'it' that don't refer to the same thing, but I'm not gonna harp on that too hard.

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just a general comment for you here, but try not to have colors continuously changing up from red-blue-red-blue. it's easier to just go red-blue. an example:
It's best to setup set up DD Dragon Dance towards the end of the game late-game
It's best to setup DD towards the end of the game set up Dragon Dance late-game
this is much cleaner and easier to implement

 

[Dawn of Ares]

Bronzong

Bronzong is able to check a large amount of wall-breakers and sweepers threats in the tier such as Wall-breakers and Sweepers like Flygon, Glalie-Mega, Dragalge, Minior and Comfey, thanks to its amazing Psychic-/Steel-typing;, which grants it 9 resistances and an immunity. Bronzong's Levitate ability Levitate also gives it an immunity to groundgives it immunity to what would otherwise be a weakness, leaving it with just three weaknesses. Its and its high defensive Defensive stats allows it to check many specially-offensive Specially-Offensive Pokemon such as Swellow, Gardevoir, Diancie, and the recently introduced Necrozma. Bronzong is also a solid setter of Stealth rocks setter thanks to it's great Bulkbulk. A very low speed stat of 30 both hurts it and helps it, as Bronzong will almost always be taking a hit before moving, however but the low speed it also increases the power of its Gyro Ball.

Ferrothorn

Thanks to its great bulk and useful Grass / Steel-typing, Ferrothorn is one of the best entry hazard setters in ubers. It fairsfares very well against defoggers such as Lati@as and Latios, especially if it runs Toxic. Also,Toxic is also useful for support Arceus forms and Giratina-Origin. Also, wWith the combination of Iron Barbs, Spikes, Leech Seed and Toxic, Ferrothorn can easily wear down opponents for a teammate to clean up later. It does have some flaws, however. Ferrothorn is rendered useless by Taunt, is very slow, and has a nasty x4 weakness to Fire.

 

[Fireflame]

Hi xapx! Ik it's late but I'm here to review your exercises.

Clefable

There are a few options for the last moveslot. Flamethrower heavily damages Steel-types such as Scizor and Excadrill, while Ice Beam lures in and OHKOes specially defensive Glicsor Gliscor. Psyschock deals more damage to Chansey, as its hits on the other side of the spectrum damage is based on the foe's physical defense. Finally, Thunder Wave is a great utility move that cripples many of Clefable's checks, including Talonflame, Scizor, (AC) and Mega(add space)Metagross.

All of your changes here were actually very good. Hyphens are used when writing about types like that, Pokemon and moves should be spelled correctly, the verb form of "OHKO" is "OHKOes", and Smogon uses the Oxford comma. You were also correct in changing "the other side of the spectrum" to a better phrase.

• There were two things that you missed, though. One of which regards the "Ice Beam lures in and OHKOes specially defensive Gliscor". It is important to know that Pokemon lure in other Pokemon, not moves. Clefable lures in Gliscor and then surprises it with Ice Beam. You can change this sentence in one of two ways. You can say "...while Ice Beam allows Clefable to lure in and OHKO specially defensive Gliscor" or you can say "...while Ice Beam OHKOes specially defensive Gliscor after being lured in".
• The other thing is more of a minor thing, but "physical defense" can just be written as "Defense". Also, you might want to say "as it targets Chansey's weaker Defense stat" or something along those lines to make readers clear as to why Psyshock's damage based on Defense is important here.

For reference, this is what my changes would look like if this was an analysis:

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There are a few options for the last moveslot. Flamethrower heavily damages Steel-(AH)types such as Scizor and Excadrill, while Ice Beam lures in and OHKOs Specially Defensive Glicsor allows Clefable to lure in and OHKO specially defensive Gliscor. Psyschock Psyshock deals more damage to Chansey, as it hits on the other side of the spectrum targets Chansey's weaker Defense stat. Finally, Thunder Wave is a great utility move that cripples many of Clefable's checks, including Talonflame, Scizor,(AC) and Megagross Metagross.

Bronzong

Bronzong is able to check a large amount of threats in the tier such as wallbreakers (remove hyphen) and sweepers like Flygon, Glalie-Mega, Dragalge, Minior, (AC) and Comfey, thanks to its amazing Psychic/Steel(remove hyphens, hyphen isn't required for [type] typing) typing, (remove semicolon, AC) which grants it 9 resistances and an immunity.

Most of your changes here were good. You worded "wallbreakers" and "sweepers" correctly, added the Oxford comma at the end of the list, and added a comma before "which".

• You were in the ballpark in regards to changing "Psychic-/Steel-typing" to "Psychic/Steel". However, Smogon likes to space words out when using slashes, and Bronzong is technically Steel/Psychic, so it should be written as "Steel / Psychic".
• "large amount of threats" is incorrect. "amount" is used for noncountable things (like money and skill). "number" is used for countable things. We are referring to "threats" here, which is countable. Therefore, the phrase should be "a large number of threats".
• Even so, "threats in the tier such as wallbreakers and sweepers" is redundant. I would pick just saying either "threats" or "wallbreakers and sweepers".
• "Glalie-Mega" should be "Mega Glalie". That's the format for writing Mega Pokemon.
• "9" should be written out as "nine".
• The trickiest part of this section was the "...and Comfey, thanks to...". There should be no comma in between "Comfey" and "thanks". This is because the entire list that Comfey belongs to is not isolated (meaning there isn't a comma before and after it; a clause that is isolated is called a nonessential clause). You can see that the beginning of the list has no comma. This comma before "thanks" only works if the comma before the list is also present ("Bronzong can beat wallbreakers and sweepers, like Flygon, Glalie, and Comfey, thanks to its typing"). It is better to remove the comma that is there than adding a new one in this case.

Bronzong's Levitate ability also gives it immunity to what would otherwise be a weakness Ground, (AC) leaving it with just three weaknesses. (add period) and Its high Defensive stats mixed defenses allows it to check many specially(remove hyphen)offensive Pokemon such as Swellow, Gardevoir, Diancie, (AC) and the recently introduced Necrozma.

You did a great job of condensing information in the first sentence, and it was great that you also removed "the recently introduced" in the second sentence; metagame shifts are indeed not allowed. Another great change was adding a comma before "leaving". Good changes with adding the Oxford comma and writing "specially offensive" correctly too.

• "Levitate also gives it immunity to Ground" should be "Levitate also gives it an immunity to Ground"
• After your changes, the beginning of the second sentence reads: "Its high mixed defenses allows it to check...". This does not have proper subject-verb agreement. The verb "allows" is referring to "defenses" here. "Defenses" is a plural noun, so the verb should be "allow". "Its high mixed defenses allow it to check...". Also, "high defensive stats" (after making "defensive" lowercase) is the same thing as "mixed defenses", so the change was subjective at the end of the day.
• Still, your edits actually don't match up with what the sentence says in regards to checking special attackers. "Mixed defenses" refers to both Defense and Special Defense, and Defense is irrelevant when talking about Bronzong's ability to deal with special attackers. So, it should be "Its high Special Defense allows...".

Bronzong is also a solid Stealth Rock setter of Stealth rocks thanks to its (remove apostrophe) great bulk. A very low Speed stat of 30 both hurts it and helps it, as Bronzong will almost always usually be taking forced to take a hit before moving, however although it also increases the power of its Gyro Ball.

Most of the changes here were fine. Changing "solid setter of Stealth rocks" to "solid Stealth Rock setter" was a justified and positive change, and good job for catching the its/it's error and the capitalization of "bulk". "Speed" should be capitalized", and adding the word "as" after the comma makes the sentence flow again without changing the comma to a semicolon. Changing "however" to "although" at the end there is also good; "however" is a conjunctive adverb, and conjunctive adverbs can't connect two independent clauses with a comma like what the example is showing.

• changing "...Bronzing will almost always be taking a hit before moving" to "...Bronzong will usually be forced to take a hit before moving" was a subjective change because they pretty much mean the same thing. Its always important to not make subjective changes because the original writing takes precedence over yours for a subjective change. Though imo I would make "be taking" to just take. Most of the time, an infinitive ("to be", "to have") followed by a gerund (verbs ending in -ing) can just be simplified to the present tense of the gerund. "Bronzong will almost always take a hit before moving".
• Technically Bronzong's Speed stat is 33, not 30. Yeah it's kinda cheap (the only reason I even know this is because I was one of the GPers who helped make the exercises), but an error like this will probably not be in an analysis when it reaches the GP stage. This is more of a QC thing and honestly looking for the correct stat number isn't exactly GP's job. The correct order of a dual typing happens much more frequently, though, so GP handles that.
• A bigger issue is that that the "both hurts it and helps it" part is fluff and should be removed because it doesn't say anything of significance.

For reference, this is what my changes would look like if this was an analysis:

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Bronzong is able to check a large amount number of threats in the tier such as Wall-breakers wallbreakers and sweepers like Flygon, Glalie-Mega Mega Glalie, Dragalge, Minior,(AC) and Comfey,(RC) thanks to its amazing Psychic-/Steel-typing;(SC) Steel / Psychic typing,(AC) which grants it 9 nine resistances and an immunity. Bronzong's Levitate ability also gives it an immunity to what would otherwise be a weakness Ground,(AC) leaving it with just three weaknesses.(period) and Its high Defensive stats Special Defense allows it to check many Specially-Offensive specially offensive Pokemon such as Swellow, Gardevoir, Diancie,(AC) and the recently introduced Necrozma. Bronzong is also a solid Stealth Rock setter of Stealth rocks thanks to it's its great bulk. A very low Speed stat of 30 both hurts it and helps it,(RC) 33 means Bronzong will almost always be taking take a hit before moving, however though it also increases the power of its Gyro Ball.

Overall, you have a solid foundation of conventional grammar and Pokemon-related grammar. There wasn't one thing in particular that you struggled with; two subjective changes in two exercises to me isn't a glaring weakness, but remember that making less subjective changes is very important to maintain the original writing. Most of the changes you made were good; it was the changes you didn't make that encompassed most of your errors. The trickier things take a little practice and getting used to, but your exercises overall were very good. I hope to see more of you in the future!

 

[Aminith]

I have returned from the grave to do these exercises, well and to get practice for when i apply sometime.
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Muk

Maximum attack Attack investment and an Adamant nature Nature lets Alolan Muk Muk-Alola deal as much damage as possible (Ac) while maximum max Special Defense EV's SpD EVs with an Assault vest AV give gives Alolan Muk Muk enough a very respectable amount of Special bulk to check Pokemon Pokémon such as Chandelure, Latias and or Gengar more effectively. A Brave nature Nature should be used if Alolan Muk is running running Fire Blast (Ac) as it doesn't lower it's special attack. Poison Touch gives all of Alolan Muk's Muk-Alola's contact moves (Just a small attacks an additional chance to Poison opponents.

 

[deetah]

Hello Aminith! I am going to review your check.

Muk

I have returned from the grave to do these exercises, well and to get practice for when i apply sometime.
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Maximum attack Attack investment and an Adamant nature Nature lets Alolan Muk Muk-Alola deal as much damage as possible (Ac) while maximum max Special Defense EV's SpD EVs with an Assault vest AV give gives Alolan Muk Muk enough a very respectable amount of Special bulk to check Pokemon Pokémon such as Chandelure, Latias and or Gengar more effectively.

- Well done with making Attack capitalized and nature lowercased as well as changing Muk-Alola to Alolan Muk.
- Lets should be changed to let here in the first line for agreement, the same reason why gives is changed to give later on.
- EVs does not need an apostrophe, so it would simply be Special Defense EVs.
- You were right in changing AV to Assault Vest, but the word Vest should also be capitalized.
- The world special in "Special bulk" should be lowercased, as it's not referring directly to a stat.
- Pokemon should be spelled without the accent, so that is a good change.
- There should be a comma after Latias, Smogon uses the serial comma.

I recommend grouping your changes together in order to make it easier for the writer to implement them. For example ...while max SpD EVs maximum Special Defense EVs with an AV gives Muk a very respectable amount of Assault Vest give Alolan Muk enough... is how I would typically phrase something like this in one of my checks.

A Brave nature Nature should be used if Alolan Muk is running running Fire Blast (Ac) as it doesn't lower it's special attack. Poison Touch gives all of Alolan Muk's Muk-Alola's contact moves (Just a small attacks an additional chance to Poison opponents.

- Good job again with making the word nature lowercase.
- Great job adding a comma in front of as, that's correct.
- it's special Attack should be changed to its Special Attack.
- Not quite sure why you added "(Just a small" right there, it is fine without.
- The word Poison should be lowercase, status effects are not capitalized.
- You were right in removing the word opponents, but without adding another word the sentence doesn't really make sense. You can add the word "foes" instead to fix this.

Overall you seem to have an understanding of Smogon terms and grammar. I recommend taking a look at the Spelling and Grammar Standards thoroughly, once you look it over enough remembering certain changes will come naturally. I hope to see more from you!

Dan of ares I will also be reviewing one of your checks.

Ferrothorn

Thanks to its great bulk and useful Grass / Steel-typing, Ferrothorn is one of the best entry hazard setters in ubers.

- Grass / Steel-typing does not need a hyphen, it should simply be Grass / Steel typing.
- The word Ubers should be capitalized.

It fairsfares very well against defoggers such as Lati@as and Latios, especially if it runs Toxic. Also,Toxic is also useful for support Arceus forms and Giratina-Origin.

- The word Defoggers should be capitalized.
- Good change by breaking up Lati@s into Latias and Latios, that's correct.
- Giratina-Origin would simply be Giratina-O, as that's the standard forme name.

Also, wWith the combination of Iron Barbs, Spikes, Leech Seed and Toxic, Ferrothorn can easily wear down opponents for a teammate to clean up later. It does have some flaws, however. Ferrothorn is rendered useless by Taunt, is very slow, and has a nasty x4 weakness to Fire.

- There should be a comma after Leech Seed.
- The word opponents should be replaced with foes, as opponent refers to the opposing battler while foes refers to opposing Pokemon.
- Good parallelism fix by adding the is before very slow.
- x4 should be changed to 4x, the number goes before the x when talking about the effectiveness of attacks.

You made some good changes, especially in fixing the parallelism, which is one of the biggest issues in writing. I recommend looking over the Spelling and Grammar Standards to help you become more familiar with Smogon grammar terms and standards. I hope to see more from you as well!

 

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Muk

Maximum attack Attack investment and an Adamant Nature nature lets Muk-Alola Alolan Muk deal as much damage as possible, (AC) while maximum SpD EVs Special Defense investment with an AV Assault Vest gives Alolan Muk a very respectable amount of Special special bulk to check Pokémon such as Chandelure, Latias or and Gengar more effectively. A Brave Nature nature should be used if running Fire Blast as it doesn't lower it's Alolan Muk's special attack Special Attack. Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola's Alolan Muk's contact attacks an additional chance to Poison poison opponents.

Tsareena

Tsareena works best on Offensive offensive teams that appreciate a Pokemon that can break through most Defensive defensive cores, (AC) as it is able to 1HKO OHKO Quagsire (RC) and 1HKO Alomomola after Rocks Stealth Rock damage. Tsareena is relatively slow, (AC) so teammates such as Choice Scarf Infernape, Choice Scarf Hydreigon or and Aerodactyl-Mega Mega Aerodactyl that can revenge kill (RH) faster threats for Tsareena it are useful. Pokemon such as Scizor and Nidoking are good Poison Resists that can help Tsareena against the majority of Poison Types Poison-types that can freely switchin switch in to it. In return, Tsareena can hit Psychic Types Psychic-types with Knock Off, and help against Water- (AH) and Ground Types Ground-types for Nidoking. It also appreciates hazard support from Rockers Stealth Rock setters like Cobalion or and Swampert, so it can wear down potential checks, can damage Rocks weak Stealth Rock-weak Pokemon like Moltres, (AC) and further pressure opponents.

 

[deetah]

Hey bigtalk! Glad to see your interest in GP. I will be reviewing your exercises.

Muk

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Maximum attack Attack investment and an Adamant Nature nature lets Muk-Alola Alolan Muk deal as much damage as possible, (AC) while maximum SpD EVs Special Defense investment with an AV Assault Vest gives Alolan Muk a very respectable amount of Special special bulk to check Pokémon such as Chandelure, Latias or and Gengar more effectively.

- Excellent job with capitalizing "Attack" and making "nature" lowercase, as well as changing Muk-Alola to Alolan Muk.
- "Lets" should be changed to "let" in this instance for agreement.
- Great job adding a comma before "while". This is correct because when while is used to mean whereas, there is a comma in front of it.
- Great job expanding "SpD" to "Special Defense". Changing EVs to investment is also a fine change, because it makes having "gives" there correct. If you had kept it as "Special Defense EVs", the "gives" would've needed to become "give."
- You were right to change "AV" to "Assault Vest".
- Correct change with making "special" lowercase.
- Pokemon is written without the accent in analyses.
- There should be a comma after Latias because Smogon uses the serial comma.

A Brave Nature nature should be used if running Fire Blast as it doesn't lower it's Alolan Muk's special attack Special Attack. Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola's Alolan Muk's contact attacks an additional chance to Poison poison opponents.

- Good job making "nature" lowercase once again.
- "As" needs a comma before it when it is used to mean "because", this is also the same with "since".
- Great job capitalizing "Special Attack".
- Well done making "Muk-Alola" into "Alolan Muk" once again.
- Good job making "poison" lowercase.
- "Opponents" should be changed to "foes" in this instance, foes refers to the opposing Pokemon, while opponents are the opposing players.

I recommend grouping your changes together in order to make it more concise for the author to understand and implement. For example, it's Alolan Muk's special attack Special Attack might get a little wonky for the author to implement. You can change this along the lines of it's special attack Alolan Muk's Special Attack.

Tsareena

Tsareena works best on Offensive offensive teams that appreciate a Pokemon that can break through most Defensive defensive cores, (AC) as it is able to 1HKO OHKO Quagsire (RC) and 1HKO Alomomola after Rocks Stealth Rock damage.

- Well done with making "offensive" and "defensive" lowercase.
- Good job putting a comma before "as".
- You are right to change "1HKO" to "OHKO", however, removing the second one changes the meaning of this sentence. Your changes turn this sentence into "...as it is able to OHKO Quagsire and Alomomola after Stealth Rock damage." This sentence should be saying "...as it is able to OHKO Quagsire, and OHKO Alomomola after Stealth Rock damage".

Tsareena is relatively slow, (AC) so teammates such as Choice Scarf Infernape, Choice Scarf Hydreigon or and Aerodactyl-Mega Mega Aerodactyl that can revenge kill (RH) faster threats for Tsareena it are useful.

- Good job adding a comma before "so" and "Choice" before "Scarf".
- There should be a comma after "Choice Scarf Hydreigon", Smogon uses the serial comma.
- Good job changing "Aerodactyl-Mega" to "Mega Aerodactyl" as well as "or" to "and".
- Great job removing the hyphen from "revenge kill", that phrase is never hyphenated.

Pokemon such as Scizor and Nidoking are good Poison Resists that can help Tsareena against the majority of Poison Types Poison-types that can freely switchin switch in to it.

- Removing "Poison Resists" is correct because "resists" should never be used as a noun, but instead of removing that phrase entirely and losing some meaning, you can change this to something like "...are good Poison-resistant Pokemon" OR "...are good Poison-type checks".
- Good job making "Poison Types" into "Poison-types", I think you forgot to make it blue instead of green though. :P
- Removing "switchin" is correct here, but it should be "switch into" rather than "switch in to".

In return, Tsareena can hit Psychic Types Psychic-types with Knock Off, and help against Water- (AH) and Ground Types Ground-types for Nidoking.

- Good job making "Psychic Types" into "Psychic-types" yet again.
- Remove the comma before "and", you'll see it flows much better without.
- Good job adding a hyphen after "Water" to make it "Water- and Ground-types".

It also appreciates hazard support from Rockers Stealth Rock setters like Cobalion or and Swampert, so it can wear down potential checks, can damage Rocks weak Stealth Rock-weak Pokemon like Moltres, (AC) and further pressure opponents.

- This should be "entry hazard support".
- Good job changing "Rockers" to "Stealth Rock setters" and "or" to "and".
- Great job removing the "can" before "damage", this makes the sentence parallel!
- Excellent job changing "Rocks weak" to "Stealth Rock-weak" and adding the serial comma after "Moltres".
- "Opponents" should be changed to "foes" here, same reason as I said above.

Overall you have an excellent understanding of Smogon coined terms and basic grammar knowledge, which is great. I did notice that you made a change but when another instance of that came up, you forgot to make that same change. There are also a few more terms that you can learn from the Spelling and Grammar Standards. Reading this thoroughly or having it open while you're working on an amcheck is a great way to become familiar with and remember the majority of C&C's standards. I hope to see more from you in the near future!

 

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Ferrothorn

Thanks to its great bulk and useful Grass / Steel-typing Steel typing, Ferrothorn is one of the best entry hazard setters in ubers Ubers. It fairs fares very well against defoggers Defoggers such as Lati@s Latias and Latios, especially if it runs Toxic, (AC) which is also. Also, Toxic is useful for support Arceus forms formes and Giratina-Origin Giratina-O. Also, with the combination of Iron Barbs, Spikes, Leech Seed, (AC) and Toxic, Ferrothorn can easily wear down opponents for a teammate to clean up later. It does have some flaws, however. However, Ferrothorn is rendered useless by Taunt, is very slow, and has a nasty x4 4x weakness to Fire.

Clefable

There are a few options for the last moveslot. Flamethrower heavily damages Steel types Steel-types such as Scizor and Excadrill, while Ice Beam allows Clefable to lure in and OHKO specially defensive Gliscor lures in and OHKOs Specially Defensive Glicsor. Psyschock Psyshock deals more damage to Chansey, as it hits on the other side of the spectrum its weaker Defense stat. Finally, Thunder Wave is a great utility move that cripples many of Clefable's checks, including Talonflame, Scizor, (AC) and Megagross Mega Metagross.

Mega Charizard X

It's best to setup DD set up Dragon Dance towards the end of the game, when Mega Charizard-X's Mega Charizard X’s checks and counters are out of play or have been weakened enough to be picked off after a boost. Charizard-X Mega Charizard X should set up on a Pokemon that it forces out, such as Mega Scizor and Celebi, or against Electric-types such as Manectric-Mega and Raikou Mega Scizor, Celebi, or Electric-types such as Mega Manectric and Raikou. Rotom-Wash Rotom-W is an easy target to setup set up on if it is running HP EV investment, as it can't 2HKO Charizard-X Mega Charizard X with hydro pump Hydro Pump, (RC) and is stalled out with Roost. Make sure you avoid Thunder Wave from pokemon Pokemon like Cresselia, Thundurus (which also has Prankster), (AC) and Mega-Slowbro as paralys paralysis cuts Mega Charizard-X's speed Mega Charizard X’s Speed in half, making it suspectible susceptible to a higher amount of revengers more revenge killers.

Mew

Mew is an extremely versatile Pokemon because it can learn every TM and HM in the game. Furthermore, Mew is the only Defogger in the metagame with access to Will-O-Wisp and no Stealth Rock weakness, which lets it cripple Defiant users such as Bisharp by halving their Attack. Overall, Mew has good offensive and defensive stats, (AC) but it is not really that outstanding when compared to bulkier Psychic-types such as Mega Slowbro, regular Slowbro, and Cresselia. Mew also has access to a form of reliable recovery in Soft-Boiled, which contributes to Mew's longevity on the field. Synchronize is a useful ability for Mew, because it can can punish status users if they inflict status on Mew, (AC) including. It can also provide utility against Scald burns. However, Mew's typing is subpar, which leaves it very vulnerable to common Bug-, Ghost-, and Dark-types, such as Scizor, Gengar, and Mega Gyarados. Mew also has four-moveslot syndrome because it cannot benefit from all the move options it learns.

hope this is still alive! most interested in the mew one as i couldn't find many errors