Choice Band Dragonite (QC 1/2)

Giagantic

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[SET]
name: Choice Band Dragonite
move 1: Dragon Ascent
move 2: Glaive Rush
move 3: Extreme Speed
move 4: Fire Punch
item: Choice Band
ability: Multiscale
nature: Adament
evs: 164 HP / 252 Atk / 92 Spe
tera type: Dragon / Flying / Normal



[SET COMMENTS]
Choice Band Dragonite is a monster capable of breaking through the sturdiest of walls with its high power STAB moves Dragon Ascent and Glaive Rush. Extreme Speed lets you revenge kill faster Pokémon like Weavile and Iron Valiant and is capable of sweeping highly damaged teams. Fire Punch is your coverage to hit Steel types such as Kingambit and Iron Treads. Your choice of Tera is between your STABs and bolstering your Extreme Speed's damage with Tera Normal; the benefits of Tera Flying or Dragon is that it allows you to break through Pokemon like non-Tera Ting-Lu, Avalugg, and Dondozo. The EVs let you outspeed fully invested base 50 Pokémon such as Iron Hands with maximized attack and the rest thrown into HP to increase overall bulk. Dragonite's reliance on Dragon Ascent and Glaive Rush result in it being heavily weakened defensively so caution is advised. Pivots that enable entry of Dragonite into play such as Toxapex and Corviknight are great partners. Offensively, Dragonite partners well with strong special attackers such as Iron Valiant and Sandy Shocks to help break past each other's walls.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Giagantic, 220859]]
- Quality checked by: [[LBDC, 464398], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
 
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Hey! I took time to get to this QC. You did a pretty good job! Comments below:
[SET]
name: Choice Band Dragonite
move 1: Dragon Ascent
move 2: Glaive Rush
move 3: Extreme Speed
move 4: Fire Punch
item: Choice Band
ability: Multiscale
nature: Adament
evs: 164 HP / 252 Atk / 92 Spe
ivs: (optional)
tera type: Dragon / Flying / Normal
in-battle alt: (optional)
shiny: (optional)


Afaik not needed, it'll be zero by default.
[SET COMMENTS]
Choice Band Dragonite is a monster capable of breaking through the sturdiest of walls with it's its high power, and new, powerful, STABs moves in Dragon Ascent and Glaive Rush are your STABs and primary means of damage. Reworded it so it sounds less like basic info Extreme Speed lets you revenge kill faster Pokémon like Weavile and Cinderace (pick anything faster and frail if you don't like these) and is capable of sweeping highly damaged teams, whereas Fire Punch is your coverage to hit Steel types such as Kingambit. You might want to split this sentence in half, it feels a bit long. Your choice of Tera is between your STABs and bolstering your Extreme Speed's damage with Tera Normal; the benefits of Tera STAB is that it allows you to break through Pokemon like Ting-Lu which otherwise wall you. Isn't Ting-Lu the only purely defensive Pokémon that Tera let you beat, though? If so, you're (maybe) better to mention defensive capabilities of Tera ig. The EVs let you outspeed fully invested base 50 Pokémon give examples with maximized attack and the rest thrown into HP to increase overall bulk. Before going to partners section, I think it should be mentioned that both Draco Ascension and Glave Rush weaken Dnite and thus in play players should use Dnite carefully. Pivots that enable entry of Dragonite into play such as Toxapex and Corviknight are great partners. Offensively, Dragonite partners well with strong special attackers such as Iron Valiant and Sandy Shocks to help break past each other's walls and Steel-types like Kingambit whose typing covers for the weaknesses of the other hey now, covering weaknesses sounds like a defensive asset. If it meant to stay on the offensive part of partner, I think you're better to find something else.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Giagantic, 220859]]
- Quality checked by: [[LBDC, add my ID plz], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
QC 1/2 when done
 

Giagantic

True Coffee Maniac
is a Community Leaderis a Community Contributoris a Tiering Contributoris a member of the Battle Simulator Staffis a Battle Simulator Moderator Alumnus
OM Leader
Hey! I took time to get to this QC. You did a pretty good job! Comments below:
[SET]
name: Choice Band Dragonite
move 1: Dragon Ascent
move 2: Glaive Rush
move 3: Extreme Speed
move 4: Fire Punch
item: Choice Band
ability: Multiscale
nature: Adament
evs: 164 HP / 252 Atk / 92 Spe
ivs: (optional)
tera type: Dragon / Flying / Normal
in-battle alt: (optional)
shiny: (optional)


Afaik not needed, it'll be zero by default.
[SET COMMENTS]
Choice Band Dragonite is a monster capable of breaking through the sturdiest of walls with it's its high power, and new, powerful, STABs moves in Dragon Ascent and Glaive Rush are your STABs and primary means of damage. Reworded it so it sounds less like basic info Extreme Speed lets you revenge kill faster Pokémon like Weavile and Cinderace (pick anything faster and frail if you don't like these) and is capable of sweeping highly damaged teams, whereas Fire Punch is your coverage to hit Steel types such as Kingambit. You might want to split this sentence in half, it feels a bit long. Your choice of Tera is between your STABs and bolstering your Extreme Speed's damage with Tera Normal; the benefits of Tera STAB is that it allows you to break through Pokemon like Ting-Lu which otherwise wall you. Isn't Ting-Lu the only purely defensive Pokémon that Tera let you beat, though? If so, you're (maybe) better to mention defensive capabilities of Tera ig. The EVs let you outspeed fully invested base 50 Pokémon give examples with maximized attack and the rest thrown into HP to increase overall bulk. Before going to partners section, I think it should be mentioned that both Draco Ascension and Glave Rush weaken Dnite and thus in play players should use Dnite carefully. Pivots that enable entry of Dragonite into play such as Toxapex and Corviknight are great partners. Offensively, Dragonite partners well with strong special attackers such as Iron Valiant and Sandy Shocks to help break past each other's walls and Steel-types like Kingambit whose typing covers for the weaknesses of the other hey now, covering weaknesses sounds like a defensive asset. If it meant to stay on the offensive part of partner, I think you're better to find something else.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Giagantic, 220859]]
- Quality checked by: [[LBDC, add my ID plz], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
QC 1/2 when done
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